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The sound of gunshots in the distance
Has me tilting my head to listen intently
Not too close I think, but not so far away

I go about my morning routine
As if this is an every day event
As if I have reached a certain level of blasé

Not thinking about the significance
Of this harsh and intrusive sound
As it relates to the lives of others

I hear sirens ululate in this early hour
They sync up with a dangerous clock
Started in the heavy grayness of pre-dawn

Ah—I think – it really was gunshots…
And go back to my grooming
My only concern is taming a wayward flip of hair

There are two women dead in the street
Three terrified children held hostage
More than two dozen officers at the scene

Only a mile and a half away
Lives are irrevocably changed
Yet I pull out of my driveway no differently

From its own dimension the standoff continues
Even after I am anonymously cocooned at the office
With every hair perfectly in place
©2008-2009 *Spectrumchaser
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:iconblackh7:
VERY well done. Good call on making it first-person, if it was "SHE goes about her morning routine[...]" it would be too easily dismissed. You gave it the power of a movie 'based on true events' whether it was or not. But those movies are still a tableau played out in front of us for our enjoyment, not something personally accessible, right? Which is the whole point you're trying to make.

Long story short, I like it! A lot. +FAV!
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Again - thank you so much for such a detailed comment!! Prior to your commenting I'd only had feedback on 3 poems, and was starting to despair...

This poem is based on a true event that happened the morning I wrote it...but I felt one step removed because of my own reaction. You got my point exactly :)

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